Barry Rose
12/3/11
Analyzing a Trend
The health of our children’s lives is in danger. Childhood obesity is a growing problem in our community as the rates keep rising. In 2008, more than one-third of children and adolescents were overweight or obese. (Guillery) Childhood obesity is a growing problem that needs to be addressed. Rates have tripled over the last three decades and will continue to rise unless parents and children take action. (Guillery) Today, 17 % of children ages 2-19 are obese.
There are many causes for this trend. One cause is an unhealthy diet. Our culture is always in a rush. Not as many people sit home and have a healthy cooked dinner. Many people choose the quicker and easier way and get fast food, or order out. Unfortunately this is also very unhealthy. Soda is also consumed at a much higher rate. Soda is also very unhealthy. Many children also choose to eat very unhealthy snacks such as chips, candy, and chocolate. These are filled with sugars, fats, and calories.
Parents need to try and create healthier food options for their children. Take the time to cook a healthy dinner at home. Don’t buy soda or unhealthy snacks, instead buy milk, water, and juices for drinks, and fruits and vegetables for snacks. Give your children healthy options and eliminate the unhealthy ones and they will start to make the right decisions on their own.
Another cause for the rise of childhood obesity is the lack of exercise. With so many technological toys, video games and movies, children are no longer getting the exercise they need. Instead of children doing outdoor activities and burning fat and calories, they are staying indoors. Children should get at least 60 minutes a day of exercise, and instead, most are getting close to none. Computer play and video games are taking over. Children would much rather stay indoors and play those games, rather than use energy playing physical games outside.
Parents need to make sure that their children get exercise somehow. Only allow children time playing games indoors if they have played outside for a certain amount of time. Make an afterschool schedule of doing home work, then an outdoor activity, dinner, and then maybe some video game play. Parents could also take time to play with their children, perhaps play catch, go for a walk, or go for a bike ride. Having activities to do with your kids will encourage them to do some on their own. Creating good healthy habits for your children is important for their health and well being. Getting your child involved in sports is another way to make sure your child gets the exercise they need.
The effects of Childhood Obesity are very bad. It can cause the development of type 2 diabetes which can be deadly to children. Type 2 diabetes in children is a chronic condition that affects the way your child's body metabolizes sugar (glucose). Type 2 diabetes was once called adult-onset diabetes. Due to the rise in children with this disease because of childhood obesity, it is now called type 2. This is directly related to heart disease, stroke, kidney failure, high blood pressure, and blindness. The emergence of type 2 diabetes in childhood and adolescence is alarming, especially when one considers the long-term public health and societal ramifications as these patients progress to chronic complications, potentially at a very young chronological age. (Copeland)
Our future is at risk of having bad health. Our children must be saved from the rising trend of Childhood Obesity. Action must be taken to stop this disease. Parents and children need to take the correct steps of diet and exercise to end the rise of this trend and begin its decline.
Work Cited:
In 2008, more than one-third of children and adolescents were overweight or obese.
Dr. Ed Guillery, “Local Experts Address Childhood Obesity” The Columbian (Vancouver, Washington)
October 1, 2011 LexisNexis Academic. Web
Rates have tripled over the last three decades.
Dr. Ed Guillery, “Local Experts Address Childhood Obesity” The Columbian (Vancouver, Washington)
October 1, 2011 LexisNexis Academic. Web
Today, 17% of children ages 2-19 are obese.
“Doctor: Childhood obesity a 'personal tragedy'” Messenger-Inquirer (Owensboro, Kentucky) Distributed by McClatchy-Tribune Business News October 1, 2011 LexisNexis Academic. Web
The emergence of type 2 diabetes in childhood and adolescence is alarming, especially when one considers the long-term public health and societal ramifications as these patients progress to chronic complications, potentially at a very young chronological age.
“Type 2 Diabetes in Children and Adolescents: Risk Factors, Diagnosis, and Treatment” American Diabetes Association, DiabetesJournal.org
Hi Barry:
ReplyDeleteYou do a solid job here. You offer a clear, appropriate thesis, fitting the assignment. You provide evidence in support of that thesis, although you will need to cite your sources more consistently at the point of borrowing.
Your analysis is in good shape as well: thoughtful and clearly organized.
Your closing veers a bit away from analysis to promotion of an idea but it does provide closure.
Important: please be consistent when citing sources at the point of borrowing.
Promising.
no post write?
cite source: Today, 17 % of children ages 2-19 are obese.
note the sudden shift in perspective from third person (parents) to second person (implied "you"): Parents need to try and create healthier food options for their children. Take the time
please cite your source at the point of borrowing and use signal phrases, okay? The effects of Childhood Obesity are very bad. It can cause the development of type 2 diabetes which can be deadly to children. Type 2 diabetes in children is a chronic condition that affects the way your child's body metabolizes sugar (glucose)
not sure what this means: Our future is at risk of having bad health
Good use of MLA but cut the commentary/annotation, right (your paper provides that information)? In 2008, more than one-third of children and adolescents were overweight or obese.
Dr. Ed Guillery, “Local Experts Address Childhood Obesity” The Columbian (Vancouver, Washington)
October 1, 2011 LexisNexis Academic. Web
Rates have tripled over the last three decades.
Dr. Ed Guillery, “Local Experts Address Childhood Obesity” The Columbian (Vancouver, Washington)
October 1, 2011 LexisNexis Academic. Web
Today, 17% of children ages 2-19 are obese.
“Doctor: Childhood obesity a 'personal tragedy'” Messenger-Inquirer (Owensboro, Kentucky) Distributed by McClatchy-Tribune Business News October 1, 2011 LexisNexis Academic. Web
The emergence of type 2 diabetes in childhood and adolescence is alarming, especially when one considers the long-term public health and societal ramifications as these patients progress to chronic complications, potentially at a very young chronological age.
Kenneth C. Copeland, MD, Dorothy Becker, MD, Michael Gottschalk, MD, PhD and Daniel Hale, MD
“Type 2 Diabetes in Children and Adolescents: Risk Factors, Diagnosis, and Treatment” American Diabetes Association, DiabetesJournal.org